As you come closer

The wish

This life-sustaining wish

A wish that never ceases to be

A hand, that would hold mine

Eyes, that would look into mine

Compassion in them

And a mere look would convey

What long sentences cannot

That I am not alone

And a mere touch would say

That the world is a safe place to be

A touch that will bring tears of relief

Relief from a sadness of decades

A sadness for the eyes that were never there

And for a touch that never came

As you come closer

Slowly, and softly

The lights dim

The noises fade

Silence remains

A tear in your eye

Tells me

That this moment

We are one

You feel what I feel

And I feel what you feel

Speech is superfluous

The pain of individuality abolished

We lie in the dark

In trust

In hope

In sorrow

We do not talk

But as the tears flow

The sound of our breathing

And the light from the stars

Makes the silence speak

That this is what life was meant to be

In darkness and solitude

A spark of love

For eternity…

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~ by tdcatss on December 31, 2010.

10 Responses to “As you come closer”

  1. Intense emotions…although the topic is almost cliche you have evaded the usual and kept us guessing what kind of relationship this is.
    Really deep poem. I like.

  2. strong write, lovely word flow…

    Greetings!

    I invite you to become a participant at Thursday Poets Rally Week 36…

    This is a golden opportunity for you to make NEW poetic friends, and have your talent directly exposed to a community of talented poets..

    Hope to see you in, Happy Friday, best wishes for the year of 2011.

    xoxox

  3. Thank you gracefulglider and Jingle for your comments. I rarely write poetry so it is encouraging to read your positive response.

    Gracefulglider, it is about an intimate relationship and i had in mind two lovers when i wrote it. but parts of it also remind me of the relationship of a father with a little son, perhaps a sister with a brother…

    Jingle, I will find out more about the rally week and see if that is something for me!

    Kaif

  4. Beautiful poem Kaif! You are multi-talented! :) Thank you for sharing it with us! Happy New Year wishes!

  5. *jaw drop* (at the length of the poem)

    lovely poem :)

  6. Thank you, ever encouraging Debbie.

    Harshika, thanks. It is not all that long, I think!

  7. Words can taint the marvel—
    The Unusual bond
    A feeling that keeps me in awe
    A sensation
    Of which I’ve heard from you so many times

    I dare ask—
    Can we strip off the transparent masks
    The caginess that refrain us
    From being what we could be
    With each other—
    Passionately unraveling the mystery
    Around us when we are together

    Many times we felt the craving
    Faces were different
    And so were hearts and souls
    Each time, though, we wore a new skin
    While desperately shedding the old

    Some talks left us spellbound
    And we read between the lines
    We created a magic
    Around those words
    Sometime yours and mine

    Some words went deeper
    And so did touches from the past
    Supernatural shades in them
    As we found
    Have left us—forever—aghast

    Our words must be out
    Before we recover our sanity
    Or we may nip them in the bud
    To save us from a sin
    That grows each time we meet
    And dwindles as we part

  8. Nice poem :) … I particularly like these lines:

    ‘I dare ask—
    Can we strip off the transparent masks
    The caginess that refrain us
    From being what we could be’

    I think, with some people, this is possible… and if you can be really spontaneous with someone, that is an indication that you should be spending more time with them!

    ‘Our words must be out
    Before we recover our sanity
    Or we may nip them in the bud
    To save us from a sin
    That grows each time we meet
    And dwindles as we part’

    This is really nice too… I have been in situations that felt sinful, yet, somehow, right. These put you in a dilemma. What is wrong and what is right? Is something you feel in the depths of your being wrong, as compared to a social norm? Life is complex…

  9. Intense. Very intense. You choose the right words, I must say.

  10. thanks!

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